In article <86ekd5t14pf2uf3sv70alhf7umb8n8ubj9@4ax.com>, NP-f31 wrote:
> Ode to a Kitten
>
> From the depths of the usenet crept he
> Like an infection
> Breeding, multiplying, splitting with invective
> His words hanging like an icicle frozen in hate
> Cold and sterile, divisive.
>
> Someone called him the most honest man in Usenet
> Diogenes would have been disappointed
> His real name, his first name, told the truth
> He was Oden, God of Lies
>
> Insanity seemed to drive him
> Helpless in his own body he spat lies
> Though he called them **_fact_**
> Venom shot from his mouth in all directions
> His victims were numbered like the days of a thousand months
>
> A lover of boys he claimed to be
> Not frickin' likely
> A Babysitter of terror was he, a nightmare to children
> More terrorist than lover of anything
> A Reporter with multiple personalities
> Too many voices packed in too little noggin
> Like a can of sardines in mustard sauce
> A recipe for disaster
>
> He claimed to be a mus.cle bound George
> But the period speaks more of constipation than strength
> A Pig Castrator without the balls, a hatchet without a handle
> He whirls in a circle of anger - the impotent hurricane
> The eye unfocused, a bullet without a target
>
> To what end this hate? Where are the multitudes he speaks for?
> A hundred newbies blink their eyes without comprehension
> He performs for an audience of one
> One spectator with many eyes
> One voice with many mouths
> Accusations fly from the mouths
> The eyes are full of suspicion and paranoia
> Fingers point at all
> Words without order or sense
> repetition repetition repitition
> Where is this leading?
> Where is the purpose?
>
> There is no meaning. There is only Oden.
>
> I hope the door doesn't hit him in the ass as he leaves The Fort.
So where else should it hit him? LOL
> Doc
> NP-f31
Not honest, just as compared to your attack at the time, as was
explained to you. You sure don't take to learnin too well. LOL
Still too personal to you, when you view constructive criticism more of
a threat than outright attacks. Outleft too. LOL
Not a God. Mad move there. You should never elevate an opponent to that
level, even in jest. Never give them an inch, even in a pinch. LOL
Diogenes was bound to be disappointed, no matter where he found
himself. It was his Lot. Salt, anyone? LOL
> Like a can of sardines in mustard sauce
> A recipe for disaster
Sounds tasty. Not nearly as bad my own kitchen disasters. LOL
Your post, although it had some poetic imagery in places, had numerous
composition errors, and was more an angry rant, than any kind of poetic
expression. I appreciate your ambitious literary effort, but I think
you would have done better if you hadn't let your anger have so much
influence over your creativity. This happens to almost everyone when
they're angry.
I've seen your excellent writing ability in many of your posts. I'm
very disappointed. I KNOW you can do better, and hope to see it in the
future.
Mover
PS. This is not an attack. LOL
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